Saturday, November 15, 2008

The Feeling.

She stares out the window, and watches the rain fall. She sees her reflection staring right back at her. Then she begins to think of the many people who have come into her life, and the ones who have left. She thinks of the many good friends she has obtained over the years. Her expression is solemn while she draws a smiley-face in the condensation on the window. She is in a state of contentment, and she quite likes it there. The friends that have entered her life have come in for a purpose, as well as the ones who left. She knows this, and experiences a moment of enlightenment. It is like everything in her life suddenly makes sense in a way that she cannot put into words. That is because it is not about the words; it's about the feeling.


Tattered and Lost said...

I just came across your blog and found it interesting. Congrats on wanting to express yourself through writing.

May I make a suggestion? Try to remember less is more. It's an old saying but true. You need to edit your thoughts. This piece is too repetitive and reads a bit like directions in a screenplay. Read what I've written below to see if what I'm saying makes sense. I might not be getting the same feeling you were going for, but I think you'll see how less can be more.

Staring out the window, watching the rain fall, she sees her image reflected in the glass. As she thinks of all the people who have come and gone in her life she finds contentment in knowing they did so for a reason. Each person had a purpose that helped guide her to this moment of self-awareness that sometimes words aren't that important. Sometimes everything is said in the moment through emotions. She drew a smiley face on the condensation of the glass and smiled as rivulets of water melted it away.


himani said...

omg..i can so relate to tis post...!!